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Post by Zebra||Moonfur|| on Dec 20, 2006 19:46:53 GMT -5
Name: Moonfur
Gender: Female
Clan: SparkClan
Age: Um. I guess you can say she was just made a warrior... (12 moons?)
Rank: Warrior
Description/Peltage: Pretty silver tabby. She has straight, meduim long fur. Her paws are slightly lighter than her pelt. Moonfur's eyes are a deep, sapphire blue.
Personality: Very shy but mischevious. She is not very tough, but she is quick and clever. She hunts very well. Moonfur doesn't like rogues as her brother was killed by one.
History: Past names: Moonkit, Moonpaw. She was the fourth in a litter of four. Only she and her brother, Hawkpaw, survived leaf-bare. Later Hawkpaw was killed by a rogue.
RP Example: Out of the corner of her eye, Moonfur saw a mouse dart by. She quickly dropped into the hunter's crouch. The mouse was nibbling on an acorn and didn't notice Moonfur. Moonfur pounced on the small brown rodent and quickly took its life with a swift bite. She pushed dirt over the dead mouse so she could collect it later. Then she went on in search of more prey.
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Post by Cloudedheart on Dec 20, 2006 19:49:42 GMT -5
Okay, can you please read other bios for ideas, in the accepted bios board, just so you het an idea of how big these bios should be.
I don't need to be critical and all, but these bios are a refrence to others so they can figure out your cat okay.
The Descrip, personality, and history need to be at least 4 sentences long.
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Post by Zebra||Moonfur|| on Dec 20, 2006 19:59:47 GMT -5
What is the history? Who the parents are or something?
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Post by Cloudedheart on Dec 20, 2006 20:05:22 GMT -5
You know how to modify posts right? Sorry, I don't mean to treat you like a nubbie.
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Post by Zebra||Moonfur|| on Dec 20, 2006 20:06:34 GMT -5
Name: Moonfur
Gender: Female
Clan: SparkClan
Age: Um. I guess you can say she was just made a warrior...
Rank: Warrior
Description/Peltage: Silver she-cat with forest green eyes. Is splotched with black all over her body.
Personality: Very shy but mischevious. She is not very tough, but she is quick and clever in battle.
History: N/A
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Post by Cloudedheart on Dec 20, 2006 20:09:22 GMT -5
Yeah I guess not,
You see in the top right corner of the posts the little square with a paintbrush that says modify, you can modify without having to repost.
And it still isn't long enough.
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Silvermoon
Kit
When life gives you lemons, make apple juice and let the world wonder how you did it.
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Post by Silvermoon on Dec 20, 2006 22:37:30 GMT -5
Here Zebes try looking at my bio (Willowpaw of SparkClan) and see if you can get any ideas. You can add things like:Previous Names (Like Moonkit, Moonpaw) Age (usually in moons, which basically are months) Description (You usually don't need a lot, but you need something. Like, is she a small, medium or large sized cat? Is she fast, or bulky and slower? What color are her claws, whiskers, etc? Is she long haired or short haired? Where are her stripes, and is she only silver? But you don't have to put all of them!  ) Personality (This is where you should get specific. Is she shy and timid, afraid to approach other cats? How is she mischivious, and what makes her so? How is she clever in battle? Is she fast, or does she muscle it out? Is she fond of kits, queens, elders, etc? Is she nervous around cats from other clans? Eh, I can't think of any more, but again, go look at some bios in the accepted board!) History (You don't have to write a book, but you need something. Did she have a tragic past? If not, were her parents kind to her? Did she have any litter mates? When did she become an apprentice? *Note: Cats usually become mentored at 6 moons and may become a warrior sometime after 10 or 11 moons* Was her mentor nice to her? She did help fend off an attack on the camp or something else like that? Rp Example (I'm not sure if you have to add this in, but I would add a short one anyway. Just Moonfur waking up in the warriors den, hunting for food, or something simple like that) I'm sure at this point you probably hate me for all my 'constructive critisism' Don't worry, all of us were nubes once. God, I don't even want to THINK about the first cat bios I made *shudder* Boy do those things give me nightmares...*more shudders*
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Post by Cloudedheart on Dec 21, 2006 16:01:37 GMT -5
Thanks Whites!
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Post by ~*Ivytail*~ on Dec 21, 2006 17:40:18 GMT -5
yeah *shudders*
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Post by Zebra||Moonfur|| on Dec 21, 2006 18:36:47 GMT -5
Oh yes. The RP thing.
RP Example: Out of the corner of her eye, Moonfur saw a mouse dart by. She quickly dropped into the hunter's crouch. The mouse was nibbling on an acorn and didn't notice Moonfur. Moonfur pounced on the small brown rodent and quickly took its life with a swift bite. She pushed dirt over the dead mouse so she could collect it later. Then she went on in search of more prey.
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Post by Cloudedheart on Dec 21, 2006 20:49:41 GMT -5
can u please use the modifying message posted above please? it saves space
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Post by Cloudedheart on Dec 21, 2006 20:52:04 GMT -5
*ehem* this is called double posting, what im doing. don't do it, it's illegal accept for staff can do it, but even then ill sometimes yell at them ignore my last post, i didnt see dat ud figured it out moons, i get that im double posting dont grill me k? |
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Post by Zebra||Moonfur|| on Dec 23, 2006 10:06:03 GMT -5
Yes, okay!  |
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Post by Cloudedheart on Dec 23, 2006 19:18:06 GMT -5
ACCEPTED!!!
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Post by Zebra||Moonfur|| on Dec 23, 2006 21:01:33 GMT -5
Thanks! (yay)
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